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RE: Sailing

in The Ink Well4 years ago

Your story follows a definite arc, @funshee and the prompt is central to the theme. The conflict between the towns is resolved after some hardship. People learn that getting along is better for all.

In the end you give us a moral. It would be better (for the structure of your story) if you put those words in the mouth of a character, probably the king. It's better of the author doesn't speak directly to the reader.

Thank you for sharing this uplifting story with us. We very much appreciate that you engage with other authors in the community.

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Thank you @theinkwell for your support and well constructive feedback on my story. I will work on my story structure building next time.