Hello @jackdeathblack, and welcome. Usually we don't encourage dream sequences because they deny the reader a satisfying resolution. In this case, you warn us in advance (the title) that this is a dream and so this is not really a case of the reader being 'tricked' out of a valid conclusion.
Your descriptions are quite good. Reading the story was a little like getting lost in an illusion.
We encourage you to comment on the stories of other authors. That mutual support is expected in this community. We hope you write for us again. You seem to enjoy writing. That makes it more fun for the reader.