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RE: CLOAKED (An Original Poetry)

in The Ink Well6 years ago

Wonderful poem @josediccus

There is a lot of religious symbolism going on here which I don't feel qualified to speak on being non-religious, but what I can speak about is the power of some of your imagery and technique :)

Sometimes,
the tenderest of smiles,
wears the saddest eyes

This opening in particular is so strong as speaks to such a profound human trait to hide emotion behind a conflicting emotion. The age old archetype of the sad clown. I also love the use of half rhyme between smiles and eyes. It is subtle, but still a half rhyme.

Thanks for sharing this with us at The Ink Well.

Glad to have you here :)

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There is a lot of religious symbolism going on here which I don't feel qualified to speak on being non-religious, but what I can speak about is the power of some of your imagery and technique :)

Yes I definitely went for a sole symbolism although it wasn't so deep to offend the non-religious, I hoped I passed across the right message.

This opening in particular is so strong as speaks to such a profound human trait to hide emotion behind a conflicting emotion. The age old archetype of the sad clown. I also love the use of half rhyme between smiles and eyes. It is subtle, but still a half rhyme.

Yes I love rhymes but I don't want it to be too obvious hence the half rhyme there really. Cloaked is a poem I wrote out of a bitter sad experience and painting pictures with images is definitely what I love doing too. I'm definitely glad you like it. I hope to keep bringing wonderful poems here