This is a charming story about giving children a good home. It's a unique story; the early part indicates that there will be financial problems involved, but that irons out quickly and the rest of the story is about the growing family. The reader may get the sense that something bad may happen, because the financial challenges seem to act as the foreshadowing of something worse to come, but it never does.
A tip for you: Readers expect a conflict of some kind that must be resolved by the end of the story. We have some great resources in our catalog of fiction writing tips including an article about adding conflict and one about story arcs. Good luck and keep writing!
Thanks so much for your response
There was a conflict at some point when he wasn't so sure if he will get the next payment
And when he finally did, he resolved his financial challenges by making good investments.
Or maybe I should found a way to bring that part towards the end.
I'll try to do better next time. Thanks. I'll check out the link too.