Although this is certainly a nice recollection of a salvaged birthday, it would have been wonderful to see you utilize creative elements in the telling. We recommend reading our article on creative non-fiction for tips on adding these details into your stories. For example, describing the scent of the popcorn, or the chill as the storm drew near would really make this story shine!
These sorts of details are what separate nonfiction from creative nonfiction. We hope this feedback helps! Thank you for sharing your story with us, and for your engagement with other members of the community.