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RE: The Ink Well Fiction Prompt 117 - Chocolate Monster

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This is one of those stories that — if it was a movie — would have the audience screaming "No, don't do it!" People never seem to heed stern warnings in horror movies.

One thing that is very strange in your story, @radenkusumo666, is that you reveal three characters, Ardi, Dini and Diki. But the name "Early" also appears multiple times. You might want to fix that, as it is very confusing.

Thanks for sharing your story in The Ink Well, and for reading and commenting on the work of other community members.

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I'm sorry, that slipped past my inspection. Because I use a translator to translate into English. I've edited and fixed it. Thank You