What an incredibly imaginative story! Here we find no lack of action, yet it would be wonderful to see plot points emphasized in action. The best way to do this would be to tell this story from the perspective of an established main character. Please also note that we do require authors to use the prompt word in posts.
The Ink Well has some great resources in our catalog of fiction writing tips. For example, we have tips on developing characters in your stories, and integrating action, dialog and narrative. These resources can help you learn how to include the important elements of fiction in your stories. We hope this feedback helps! Thank you for sharing your story with us, and for your engagement with other members of the community.
Okay, thank you. I will learn more about plot points emphasized in action. I'm going to learn how to include important elements of fiction in my stories. Thank you very much for your feedback. 😊😊