A superbly developed story that leaves us hungry for resolution. Of course, we can imagine that the younger brother will return. But, we wonder, will wisdom and knowledge prevail, or will brute force win the day (the eon)?
The dialogue is excellent. The narrative engrossing. And, of course there is action. Three elements of the prompt are managed. And yet, you do so much more. You hang a complex story on the frame of these three basic story elements. It's obvious you take great pleasure in writing. That is wonderful to see.
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Thank you for the compliment. Sorry for not responding, I was a bit retired from technology, hiking.