You have the bones of a good story here, @sabiukpa, but it is riddled with avoidable errors. The narrative flows. You describe scenes vividly. You have a strong arc. However, there are so many errors (ex: "He took than more enemy combatant, me and the rest of the boys combined) that it distracts the reader from the meat of the story.
Also, we really appreciate authors who support others. While you do comment on other authors, the comments don't really tell anything about the story.
We are taking the time, and trouble, to comment on this piece because it does have good potential. It is our belief that you could turn in really fine stories if you clean them up a bit.
Thanks for sharing this with us.
Thanks for the honest review, and I will work on the necessaries and try do what is needed.