This is an engaging narrative. We start with a little boy who is easily distracted. While this leads to his kidnapping, it also leads eventually to the rescue of another kidnap victim. You hold our interest to the end of the story.
It would be nice to know if Ade was more interested in school after this bad experience. There is one line in the story where it seems spell check incorrectly inserted words. Instead of 'rode' in the following line you probably mean 'rope', and instead of 'tide' you probably mean 'tied'. You might like to change those words so your story flows more smoothly.
as he entered he discovered a girl tide up with a bloody rode
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