A familiar theme of the time-traveler who upsets the fabric of time.
Yep the story, was inspired, by the movie "The Time Machine."
Your story, whilst creative, relies a little too heavily on narration, causing an imbalance between the dynamic trio of narrative, action, and dialogue.
Thank you, I got carried away, by the story telling 😅.
It's easily done 😊. We shall look forward to your next story to see where you take us!