This story has a classic theme: riches, at what cost? Parables that talk about a bargain with the devil are really about, what moral cost is there to success? In this story, apparently, something grim has happened. Readers worry on two counts: What will happen to the brother, and what will happen to Bianca since she has violated the strict prohibition.
Any number of endings suggest themselves. Most of these do not appear to be happy. You build suspense nicely as Bianca goes down the hall. We do wish, though, for some clearer resolution. What business was her brother in? The story is well-written enough that readers actually do want to know.
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I like this story a lot. It gives out the correct amount of information, like you know what you're looking but details weren't shoved in your mind. You have enough information to trigger your imagination.
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This story has a classic theme: riches, at what cost? Parables that talk about a bargain with the devil are really about, what moral cost is there to success? In this story, apparently, something grim has happened. Readers worry on two counts: What will happen to the brother, and what will happen to Bianca since she has violated the strict prohibition.
Any number of endings suggest themselves. Most of these do not appear to be happy. You build suspense nicely as Bianca goes down the hall. We do wish, though, for some clearer resolution. What business was her brother in? The story is well-written enough that readers actually do want to know.
Thank you for posting this story in the Ink Well community.
I like this story a lot. It gives out the correct amount of information, like you know what you're looking but details weren't shoved in your mind. You have enough information to trigger your imagination.
Nicely written.
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nice, I really like your writing
A beautiful story, i too would love to know what exactly her brother would have to do with all that.
Good job @ubani1, thank you for sharing.