That is a very brave act, to give your life for the welfare not only of your child but to put an end to a war between families. The story has a very beautiful message. Not all of us live our lives in the same way.
Wow. This is very moving! What a shame when families are at war for generations. After so many years, they don’t even remember what started the whole dispute anyway. His father was definitely a hero for sacrificing himself. Great job!
A great inspiration this conflict between families that ends on the day of the protagonist's birth, to connect with the call of the week.
This theme is an almost universal one that achieves its greatest and most beautiful expression in Romeo and Juliet, but which appears from time to time in film and literature, taken from regional legends.
You have given the story emotion and interest @ubani1.
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Great story, @ubani1. It's interesting that his family kept the secret from him for so long. Now I wonder what it will be like for him to see the Lorenzo girl at school. It could end up being an interesting spin on Romeo and Juliet or West Side Story!
I'm really impressed with your storytelling and how far your writing has come. It's wonderful to see. I hope you're enjoying the journey! One thing I thought I would mention is that some of your sentences are missing punctuation. It's a good idea to do one final edit before you publish so you look for those things. :-)
Your story is touching and well written. I compare this tale to our reality - some ethnic groups have longstanding feuds due to hate stories passed down through generations. Your story captures this reality aptly.
Imagine a father giving his life to not only save his people but also secure his son's future. Gripping! Well done. 🙂
Wuaoo What a touching story, you made me hold my eyes, I reach my heart, that good that you are already at peace and in tranquility, because your father will always be proud of you and always take care of you, it was a pleasure to meet with your post a hug 💋❤️
It was a good read. Dang, that conflict thing. Even so, you brought us in the world where war could just be hurting everyone. You brought me in a story where everything should be stopped to the next generation and to the next. It was sad to learn about his death but sometimes we need someone a sacrifice to achieve a certain thing.
That is a very brave act, to give your life for the welfare not only of your child but to put an end to a war between families. The story has a very beautiful message. Not all of us live our lives in the same way.
Wow. This is very moving! What a shame when families are at war for generations. After so many years, they don’t even remember what started the whole dispute anyway. His father was definitely a hero for sacrificing himself. Great job!
A great inspiration this conflict between families that ends on the day of the protagonist's birth, to connect with the call of the week.
This theme is an almost universal one that achieves its greatest and most beautiful expression in Romeo and Juliet, but which appears from time to time in film and literature, taken from regional legends.
You have given the story emotion and interest @ubani1.
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Great story, @ubani1. It's interesting that his family kept the secret from him for so long. Now I wonder what it will be like for him to see the Lorenzo girl at school. It could end up being an interesting spin on Romeo and Juliet or West Side Story!
I'm really impressed with your storytelling and how far your writing has come. It's wonderful to see. I hope you're enjoying the journey! One thing I thought I would mention is that some of your sentences are missing punctuation. It's a good idea to do one final edit before you publish so you look for those things. :-)
Great! Your writing just keeps getting better and better!
Your story is touching and well written. I compare this tale to our reality - some ethnic groups have longstanding feuds due to hate stories passed down through generations. Your story captures this reality aptly.
Imagine a father giving his life to not only save his people but also secure his son's future. Gripping! Well done. 🙂
Wuaoo What a touching story, you made me hold my eyes, I reach my heart, that good that you are already at peace and in tranquility, because your father will always be proud of you and always take care of you, it was a pleasure to meet with your post a hug 💋❤️
Oh my this was really good 👌🏼 Very touching and very well written!!
This is a beautiful, well-constructed story. It has the symmetry of a great story. It was a pleasure to read. Thank you!
It was a good read. Dang, that conflict thing. Even so, you brought us in the world where war could just be hurting everyone. You brought me in a story where everything should be stopped to the next generation and to the next. It was sad to learn about his death but sometimes we need someone a sacrifice to achieve a certain thing.
It was good.