What a good story brother, in which the king had to sacrifice his life and those of his soldiers to keep the life and integrity of his community protected, also very good idea to create a statue in honor of the fallen during that battle. Greetings.
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An interesting story. The general sacrificed his life together with others. The king did well by putting a statue to keep remembering them for what they did to their kingdom.
The legend of the general--this would also make a good title for this story. You develop the theme very well. The tone of the story is consistent with a tale that might be told about heroic feats of old. You describe the push and pull of battle so the reader understands why the General had to sacrifice his life in order to save his community from barbarians.
Thank you for posting this story in the Ink Well community.
Hello @ubani1,
Your last paragraph is perfect. I'll start with that, because that is the last thing in the reader's mind. An epic war is waged. The very existence of the kingdom is a stake. The dimension of the sacrifice is enormous. All warriors must die in order to save the people.
The way you tell story, that loss of life is tragic, but justified. There are a few rough patches in the story where style interferes with the flow of the piece, but still it all comes out well in the end.
I hope you keep writing, and posting your stories in the Ink Well community.
What a good story brother, in which the king had to sacrifice his life and those of his soldiers to keep the life and integrity of his community protected, also very good idea to create a statue in honor of the fallen during that battle. Greetings.
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An interesting story. The general sacrificed his life together with others. The king did well by putting a statue to keep remembering them for what they did to their kingdom.
The legend of the general--this would also make a good title for this story. You develop the theme very well. The tone of the story is consistent with a tale that might be told about heroic feats of old. You describe the push and pull of battle so the reader understands why the General had to sacrifice his life in order to save his community from barbarians.
Thank you for posting this story in the Ink Well community.
Hello @ubani1,
Your last paragraph is perfect. I'll start with that, because that is the last thing in the reader's mind. An epic war is waged. The very existence of the kingdom is a stake. The dimension of the sacrifice is enormous. All warriors must die in order to save the people.
The way you tell story, that loss of life is tragic, but justified. There are a few rough patches in the story where style interferes with the flow of the piece, but still it all comes out well in the end.
I hope you keep writing, and posting your stories in the Ink Well community.
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