Hello prof,
How are you doing, please? It was a pleasure to see that you read my writeup I'm grateful and sorry for it not being as lucid as it ought to have been. So let me see if I can make the general idea quite simple for you.
So basically what I was trying to do is draw our attention to the possibility of these two oxidative biomarkers thus malondialdehyde and superoxide dismutase levels in the eye or the body having any correlation with one developing myopia or having their myopia progress as the days or years go by.
And so if these two have any form of correlation with myopia then possibly scientist can look into it to find a way to combat myopia. And so what I tried to do in this writeup is to describe the mode of action for the two biomarkers in terms of their oxidative functions and how they can thus be directly or indirectly looked at to measure or predict myopia growth and development that way we could arrest myopia by counteracting them.
I am not certain if am able to shed a bit more light on to it though however please let me know if this helps in anyway
Thanks for the clarifications. I confirm that it helps a bit to understand ad it made what I got from my first reading more concrete.
Note that the only message I wanted to pass with my reply is that by adding a definition of every concept used in the post could be really helpful to your readers. For instance, here I would have re-defined what an oxidative biomarker was and then connect it with the two examples you use. In this way, laymen and laywomen will be able to better corner what is going on.
Of course, feel free to dismiss this comment if you don't like it. There is no obligation (this is however the kind of feedback I would personally be very happy to get, so that I could improve myself) ;)
Thank you prof I believe your comment is very helpful and would go a long way to improve my writing and the way I communicate my ideas to the layman or general public. I do agree with you and I am certain following this process would make things so much better for all my readers. I look forward to applying it in my subsequent ideas or writeups. Thanks and I wish you a wonderful day
You are very welcome!
Cheers!