nice worldbuilding here.
literally my only suggestion is formatting, and it's a preference I have. a line between paragraphs and speakers helps keep a clear focus on what is being spoken about by whom.
That is useful for editing as it helps show where paragraphs are too similar in length.
Thanks man, I took your advice and left breaks between each paragraph just to try and aid the readability of the stories. It does make it a bit easier to follow I think.