3rd page of the untitled one-shot manga

[yardne]

finally: the 3rd page. It is getting serious now D:

[further below you may find linked images of the first two pages, just scroll down ]

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page 3

the hopping raven is kinda surrounded... yea, not really, 'cause the attackers are all on the same spot, but the little bird seems to be not fast enough on his feets (maybe injured, which is why he doenst fly till now? well, I don't know it either) and the wolves are hungy *shrug

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Whose side are you on?

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What happened until now?

< page 1 >
check it out here (click the image)

there is also a translation (english and russian) for those who dont speak german

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< page 2 >
check it out here (click the image)

there is also a translation (english and russian) for those who dont speak german

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[ P.S.: I have to learn for an exam now, thus there won't be updates on this manga for a while ]

Comments

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[yardne]

hi, thank you! yes I would like to get featured in your post :)

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[veryspider]

wow very nicely drawn, @yardne ! amazing pages, so far ! I love it :D

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[yardne]

thx @veryspider :)
it is also a nice and funny (and partly frustratin) experience to bring a story to small, sequenced panels, not something I've really done before... before I just doodled in the class :D

[lennstar]

Gut gezeichnet, aber ich glaube am Text solltest du noch arbeiten ;)

[yardne]

danke :)
*seufz
ja, das haben IRL auch schon n paar gesagt *so tu als hätte ich offline auch ein leben :P
wortwiederholung, kommasetzung etc...
was ist dir aufgefallen, @lennstar?

[lennstar]

Naja, Rechtschreibung wäre z.B. ein Komma nach Angst angebracht, aber ich meinte die Schreibe an sich. Kein Rhythmus, Bilder erzwungen... holprig wie eine alte Römerstraße.

Schreib nen 100.000 Wörter Roman, dann dürfte deine Schreibe so langsam leidlich zu ertragen sein. Momentan klingst du wie ich vor 1 Million Wörtern.

Und das ist nicht im geringsten Böse gemeint.

[yardne]

Argh... Mist -.- das eine oder andere Panel habe ich tatschlich nachträglich ersetzt und hatte gehofft, dass es dem Ablauf nicht anzumerken ist.
Schade, aber danke für die Hinweise!
Yo, ist ok.