One edit, you missed an i on "like fire" in the second last stanza, unless I'm realllly dumb and am missing some literary intent here.
I liked the verse about the clockling ticking in reverse. I liked it a lot. Temporality is something I think a lot about in my work.
Very evocative, and full of powerful imagery. Flows well too.
Thank you.
I once intentionally wrote "mispelt" in a poem. You never know when an error is intentional.
My error "clockling" in my above comment was not intentional, but I shall let it endure on. A little, cute clock!
Edit, in fact, it wasn't "clockling" it was just clocking.
Time does in fact, clobber us, so I guess it makes sense. :D I changed it to clockling regardless.