I've played your game
And got sick of it fast
A revelation I see now
How have you been?
Dry as forever more
With hate in my eyes
Seeing nothing but guilt
Too much for my weakness
What is your motive today?
Weak as ever from your strength
Not knowing my own to see
How I plan to defeat you senseless
I can see that look in your eye
And it has no meaning or reason
Other than your jealousy and envy
As nothing can be seen otherwise
Beautifully written, pure touch of self-awarness mixed with anger. I just love the fact that protagonist of the poem is accepting his own flaws as well.
Plus, it seems like you are new on this platform. If you need any sort of help, feel free to ask. Would love to help a fellow writer. If you want your content to reach others, then try posting it in relative communities. I cannot recall the exact name, but I do remember a community about poetry. And use more (relevant) tags, also add a picture. I personally prefer my own clicks, but the choice is all yours. I hope you won't mind me saying all this.
Have a poetic day!
Peace 🕊
Edit: Community is called "Blockchain Poets".
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Poems with strong emotions are a great way to not only give voice to how we're feeling but also give comfort to those feeling the same way.
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