I Told The Universe I Exist And I Don't Need Reply
I feel older now
At least older than 16
The world seems like it's so much smaller
Yet there's so much I haven't seen
My siblings are ahead of me
And have long since passed me by
I just wish I wanted something
I wish I would let myself try
Summer is fading to nothingness
And soon I'll be starting Junior Year
I wish I could just overcome
What it is that I fear
I haven't the slightest motivation
But I hate wasting time
The only thing I have ever liked
Is making the universe rhyme
But it's unnatural and it's absurd
To think that I have a say
In how the universe sounds
But I wish there was a way
I told the universe that I exist
And I might get a reply
But for now I'll sit staring
At a bright blue lifeless sky
@indigowaltz
A haiku to @indigowaltz composed of haikus stolen shamelessly.
Universe speaking
You existed and not
until we observed.
Quantum mechanics
Can only be understood
With uncertainty.
Now observed
Your wave form collapsed
Enjoy your steem!
I told the universe that I exist
And I might get a reply
But for now I'll sit staring
At a bright blue lifeless sky
I like this part. Keep going. Art is a difficult category which not everyone understands
Thank you, What you said means a lot.
Beautiful poem Jack. It seems effortless and flows well. How long have you been writing poems?
A little less than 3 years, although i only discovered my talent about a year ago.
That's great! I'm sure your hard work paid off. Can you offer any tips on how to write a good poem?
Well before I write each poem I have to have a clear message in mind. Most of my poems are based around simple phrases that I find interesting. Then I go from there.
Wow, I see, that's interesting. Thanks for your advice.
You think well beyond your years, @indigowaltz. You're a natural.
Thank you!
Wow loved your poem. Universe dont need your reply it has already set your future.
Thanks!
couplets ftw
Haha yep!
a very sweet little poem
Thank you very much!
I didn't like the poem. Well, I am writing something in Russian, but I have read a lot of English poetry to say that this is, well, probably, not exciting at all :)
@zakharsmirnoff
Poetry is a form of art. Like or not like is not the point. Also poetry doesn't have to be exciting.
In fact the vast bulk of poetry isn't there to be exciting. It's there for catharsis.
Everyone who comments is entitled to their own opinion. I respect whatever you have to say. Thank you for the feedback.
nice post. its cool
Thanks a bunch!
You are the universe, reply to yourself.
Haha yeah, thank you!
Make sure to check out my others powms. This one doesn't rank too highly.
nice !! great work keep it up
Thanks a bunch!!
Your thoughts flow flawlessly.You are gifted.Keep writing more poem.Expecting a lot from you
Haha yep!
Thanks!
Well hopefully you'll enjoy my next post.
I do agree with you. You have a right to an honest opinion, and I am fine with you expressing it. But I'd still rather not pick sides either way.
It's fine. You are entitled to your own opinion and I respect that.
stop trolling, @feminism
The community appears to have a different opinion.
Indeed.