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A quiet passion
I own you
and you
own me
in a silken net
sort of way
So many ways
to be entangled
But the subtlest is love
the most deadly
but gentle
is love and
I don't know how it'll
all go but I
thank Time for
each moment
I can remember and
for the feel of your hand
And I thank the velvet Darkness
for summer nights
and an unoccupied
bed
Special thanks to @geke for the inspiration to post my stream of consciousness writing, and a big shout-out to the editors at Isle of Write for helping to edit it, especially @geekorner.
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There's this uber strong moment in there:
"So many ways
to be entangled
But the subtlest is love"
It gives underpinning to what follows and a huge sense of gravitas. Good stuff! Great poem.
Beautiful! You are inspiring me to use my creative energy more. Thank you <3
I'm so excited to see more from you! One of my favorite parts about steemit is workshopping and having the opportunity to see other people's work!
Thank you! I love the way Steemit connects everyone. It has been so wonderful to feel able to break out of my shell and post more. Thanks for all of the support!
I love the dark underbelly of this along with the lusciousness of the words closer to the surface.
<3
Beautiful work,dear. The beauty of good poetry is when the poet is able to communicate his or her emotions about what he/she is writing about. At that point the reader or listener begins to feel what the poet feels or felt. This is what you @sunravelme has done with this work. Congrats,ma. I will love others to see this.
mannnn I love thinking about what "a silken net sort of way means." It's that kind of tactile detail that reaches deeper than even the senses can go.
I really liked the personification of Time and Darkness. I thought those were nice twists. This poem left me with a feeling of excitement and content followed by a bit of mystery. Nice write. Thanks for sharing.
this line ''And I thank the velvet Darkness'' just made my day.
I'm so glad! I normally write dark stuff, this was one of the few happier ones that I've produced
Dear @sunravelme,
I began feeling content and ended with a stirring inside. Now to seek out my own silken net.
Yay for the silken net! Thank you for all your recommendations in the workshop!
o0o0o I love this very much. A beautiful expression on your part! <3 Thank you for sharing.
Thank you! I really liked your poetry- the idea of carrying each other when times are hard is such a good one!
It's important <3 Thank you kindly!!
sort of way
So many ways
to be entangled
mmm, these three lines sound entangled...... love these words and images
Thank you lovely! Always nice to hear from you :)
thats rare lovely. well done
Thank you! It was fun to go through the workshopping process on it
A lovely nugget of writing!
Thank you Amber!
within short period of time, and you have canvas such upovote.i salute you
Sure is easier to canvas the sea of steemit for upvotes than paint a canvas with poetry, eh?
i think i will like to learn the act of canvassing upvote from you
Good nice