The way your poetry flows is amazing, @joeylim! Transitions like this...
a woman with an ivory face —
the white paint of which he did not peel away
with his fingertips before that night.But the paint was peeling and
the flakes were falling
from the wall in the master bedroom that night
where his wife was still on her knees,
... are not easy to do well (in my experience, anyway), and you've used them here with great success. Wonderful, evocative, prose, and...
Awwww THANK YOU @traciyork ((': <3
Do you write poems too?
You're very welcome, @joeylim! And I do the occasional poem here and there - my last attempts were a bunch of (intentionally) silly haikus. 😊