Interesting story.
I will just say that I find it's easier to read (online) stories when we turn the paragraph indent to a new row... (You can see examples on my page.)
I found you from @audreybits' post for the Pay it Forward Curation Contest for this week. Keep up the good work!
Thanks for commenting Lori! I appreciate the tip on the formatting.. I've been trying both ways and couldn't decide which way I liked better. Nobody had commented with an opinion one way or the other, so I had no idea which way people might prefer. I think I'll stick to the new row way from now on