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RE: Manic Pixie Dream Girl- Dead of the Night

in #story6 years ago

This is powerful writing. The bookend monologues at beginning and close are kind of hypnotic and trance inducing. The dialogue is just fantastic, some of the most realistic and believable back and forth dialogue between two instantly distinct characters that I have read in a long time. At first I was put off by the length of that section of dialogue, but as it progressed and I got drawn deeper and deeper into the two characters I realized that you have really created something special here. Honestly I am really really impressed, this is powerful writing IMO.

One piece of friendly advice - it is best practice here to source all images you do not own copyright to. Even better would be to obtain them from a free use website like pixabay or wikicommons (and still source them in that case as well).

Much love - Carl

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Thank you so much for this review. It really made my day.