Thank you! I exercised a lot more patience with this story than I normally do. I wrote the draft, let it settle, did another pass, and repeated this process about five times. I'm pretty content with how it turned out. This is something I've wanted to write for about a year. I left a whole lot to the imagination between the farmer and the woman. They obviously had some kind of reconciliation after the encounter at the protest that led them to that cafe table. In my mind it happened online in a private message. Somehow they saw the humanity in each other and, I think, that's all that needs to happen.
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It shows. This is so intelligent and thoughtful. We all have ideas about what AI will do. Writers have been offering scenarios for years. You offer something novel. I liked the relocation scheme. That was something I hadn't read before, in exactly that way. And yet, it is so likely...managed society has been tried before. In so-called democratic regimes incentives are offered to induce people to move. In more autocratic regimes people are simply relocated to suit the needs of 'society'. I liked the idea of a benevolent and subservient Max, but that entity did give me pause: perhaps benevolent now, but with such control and knowledge of the individual maybe possessing the power to sabotage autonomy.
There was so much here that was interesting and carefully plotted. Also, I repeat, your language (the writing) was great.
Great job, worth the time you put into it.
I really appreciate that. It's wonderful to have the luxury of all this time to spend on my writing. Regarding the relocation efforts, I thought that would be something a benevolent AI might do to help increase the odds of our survival during wars and cataclysms. I may decide to release a book of short stories (I think I have over 30 at this point) at some point but am a little gun shy because how poorly the last book sold. But book sales aren't everything so we'll see how it unfolds. Thanks again for taking the time to read this one!