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RE: ๐Ÿ’œ My First Short Story - Today's Special ๐Ÿ’œ

in #writing โ€ข 8 years ago

oh my.... what a twisted ending! I love the little plug ins to your real life.. or at least I assume so with the references to Cape Town and Steemit ahaha. it's almost like this event actually happened to yourself.

My only critique I thought of was the mention of the fortune cookie was never re-mentioned again. You set it up in the first sentence and I thought you would drift back to after the reveal of what happened to the woman.

Good job though! It was entertaining!

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oh thank you for that feedback - i appreciate that very much!

and yes, inspiration was taken from some real-life events!