I like the way you really weave details that make the people feel real, (I loved the idea of his hair floating away) but leaves the audience begging for more context, especially for setting. Good job!
I like the way you really weave details that make the people feel real, (I loved the idea of his hair floating away) but leaves the audience begging for more context, especially for setting. Good job!
Thank you so much for the feedback! More chapters will be coming soon!