you set yourself far more of a challenge than asked for here as well! The depth of history between the characters, having invested their lives in this together, and one of them having the shock fear of nearly dying making Mike question everything so far, and at nearly 30, facing that what he had spent all his time on was not only a waste of time, but now endangering his life. To hear someone who feels like a life friend not care about his life or his health, thinking only of the glory - it's a thought process he must have wrestled with himself. Joey insistence and almost anger makes it feel like they were the last two standing, from a group of teenagers who used to jump their BMX’s in the park, and he’s unable to accept the last one of them moving on and leaving him behind. Very well told!
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Thank you so much! I’m glad Joey and Mike’s history came through. Joey’s fear about being alone and Mike’s “wrestling” as you put it with his decision were things I particularly hoped were clear 😊