You're welcome :) you know, it is always easy to notice somebody else's flaws, yet it doesn't mean I know how to improve it or write it better myself ;)
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You're welcome :) you know, it is always easy to notice somebody else's flaws, yet it doesn't mean I know how to improve it or write it better myself ;)
It's alright, I think I know it myself, how to rewrite it and make it better.
“Good work, girl. We are all done for today. Here, have some oats”, said Sami calmingly patting the chestnut mare trembling with fatigue. “It sure was tough today. How on earth were there so many rocks in the field, and those roots were insane! I'm surprised we survived.”
I've yet to think about how to incorporate the inheritance into the dialogue, or otherwise describe what had happened, but I think I'll find a way eventually.