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RE: Planet P234-OO1

in #writing8 years ago

Really enjoyed this. Sucked me right in from the start.

a brawl so large it emptied onto the streets like a flash flood after the levy breaks.

Made my jaw drop, the wording was so perfect!

Fists flying and knees poking good fun

Made me laugh out loud.

And I really loved the mix of rhyme and prose, overall! Keep it up!

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Wow. Thank you for the feedback. That means a lot. I will continue down this path and see where it leads.

Sweet! Looking forward to see what you discover!