I feel so much excitement about Dusty's story.. When I was reading this from part 1, I was imagining the things and the situations of this fantasy story. It seemed like I'm in the world of the past. Well, I felt envy for Dusty of being with the the pets of Drake. And I was thinking after I read this Part 7, how old is Dusty here? Sorry for asking @michelle.gent, I'm just getting to started to the next part. The questions in my mind now are:
- Does Nightshade really can't talk to anyone?
- Where did Pockle go?
- What was Nightshade trying to tell Dusty he bumped up to her shin?
- Will Dusty and Fire Imp could help to save Pockle's lamp-light for going out forever?
I can't wait to read the part 8...
And @michelle.gent
I'm a Thai National and I'm new here at Steemit. I do have 2 horror stories that I had written recently which I called it "Creepy Tales" that I originally wrote and some poetry that I had written a weeks ago.
If you don't mind, I would like you to read these two stories that i'd written recently.
https://steemit.com/writing/@thidaratapple/creepy-tales-by-thidaratapple-2-the-18th-floor
I just want to know if my English writing is ok and want to hear some comments from you because I saw your post and you're one of the mentors in writing here at Steemit. It feels good to be mentored by a good writer.
Thank you very much and I will wait for the part 8. Hopefully you'll post it tomorrow. 😊
I've taken a look at the story you put in the #story-mentor tag and I think you have to work on how to project your story.
Your English seems to be good, but there is a lot of 'info-dump' in the story.
Details you don't really need are dropped into the beginning and it detracts from the story.
From what I've read of your work, you need a lot of guidance.
I hope this feedback doesn't upset you, there is a potential, your idea is good, the telling of it needs work.
I wrote the feedback here because I didn't want to put this at the bottom of your story. I hope that's ok for you.
I didn't felt upset when I read your comment from my work @michelle.gent. I'm very thankful for you by letting me know my mistakes at my work. I will do my best on writing and thank you for letting me use #story-mentor. :)
Hi @thidaratapple,
Dusty is around 18 years old in this.
I can't answer any of your other questions as I'm still writing the story, but I'll try to answer at least some of them as I'm writing.
Please feel free to use the story-mentor tag for your stories, I do try to read them, even if the person isn't in the mentorship group. If I like what I see, I may invite you to join the group.
Thanks for commenting :)