I was not feeling well Yesterday. I saw that you had posted and was excited but wanted to feel better before I read your story. After a few hours, I still wasn't feeling well so this was my mindset when starting to read your story...
By the time I wrote my comment my headache was forgotten. Your story pulled me in and kept me. The main character I loved and hated...... :D
I wanted to know more at the end too!
So all I can say is your story flowed perfectly.
My reaction was real. I was so blown away I WAS at a loss for words.
It was written that well.
I'm sorry to hear you weren't feeling well. Hope things are better now!
And thanks a lot for letting me know your impression. I actually love writing up characters that both intrigue and scare us ;). Really happy to hear you thought the flow was fine, and that it held your interest till the end :D.
And thanks again for putting this contest out there!