I gave up today. Yes, me. I even wrote the words to a friend when they said I could not. But words didn't matter. In my soul, I had given up. I was tired. I was hurting. I was done trying.
I closed my conversation with my friend. Before I closed out of Discord, there was one red dot from a special friend. I had not left them a message, so I clicked to see what they wanted.
I broke down in tears when I read what was there.
If you ever thought you were alone, I am here to say we are not. The world is filled with angels that show up when you need them most. Today I was beyond repair; it took one word and one person to make me see the light again.
You know who you are, and THANK YOU!
Below is my Create the Scene passage. I made this post to make myself work on the part of my writing I can improve. I figured this way; I do not have to write a whole story to learn; others may want to join if they thought it would be fun.
The #createthescene tag was never meant to be a burden to anyone or me. I had a terrible week that started ten minutes after I had made the initial post.
Anyway... Below is my try at improving my scene building.
First version
Angry black clouds rolled over the skies, covering all in its wake. No more shiny, twinkling lights, no more moon to light the way down the rock-lined path. The air was filled will anger that boiled and bubbled. Oxygen was sucked up into the swirling clouds leaving dead silence behind.
Cracks of sound could be heard coming from the very clouds above. Soon followed by flashes of angry light piercing the blackest black's depths. The earth is still in its rotation, not knowing if it will survive. Never before had such anger been spilled all in one place.
Time stood still while the sky beat its breast, shedding every bit of anger out of its soul. There was no lull in the rampage as time ticked by.
Just as the earth could take no more of the pressure the storm was causing, a gust of wind shot up from the core. The clouds tried to hold their ground but didn't stand a chance against the breath of fresh oxygen.
A light came over the clouds, and the human form was shone at last. Long white hair cascaded down as she bowed and flew off feeling better after having her say.
Edited Version
Angry black clouds rolled over the skies, covering all in its wake. No moon or twinkling stars lit the way down the rock-lined path. The air was filled will anger that boiled and bubbled. Oxygen was sucked into the swirling clouds leaving dead silence behind.
Cracks of sound could be heard coming from the clouds above. Flashes of enraged light pierced the blackest black's depths.
The Earth's rotation came to a halt. Never before had such anger poured out all in one place. Time stood still while the darkness shed every particle of anger out of its soul. There was no lull in the deadly rampage as time ticked by.
Just as the Earth could take no more pressure, a gust of wind shot up from the core. The clouds tried to hold their ground, but they didn't stand a chance against the breath of fresh oxygen it was impacted with.
The human form was shone at long last. Long white hair cascaded down as the human bowed to the Earth she loved.
Sitting down with something I wrote and trying to improve. It was a lot of fun. Time-consuming but that is to be expected. I am very happy with the end result.
Help someone smile today. It can not hurt you.
Snook
Red Sky Photo by Dewang Gupta on Unsplash
dark sky Photo by Victor Rodriguez on Unsplash
Rock path Image by SplitShire from Pixabay
All photos are mine unless otherwise stated.
special friends are special for this reason... They do care and understand things... Sometimes all a person need in some situation is getting a message like that.
Woah, You built the whole scene in Awesome way. !LUV ED it.
I SO agree!
and THANK YOU!! for stopping to read and liking it too!!
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This is amazingly beautiful. I love every word written. Thank God for those amazing souls you have as friends. I hope you get better and stronger because you are an incredible person and you are loved cos you matter. Thanks, Snook for sharing this, I hope to join the #CreatetheScene when I get better from the illness that camped me in like a mother bear.
I hope you start to feel better very soon!! I know it has been a long time since you started to feel so bad!!!
You take your time and just get better. We will all be here when you do!
HUGS!
I thought you are leaving writing at first and it gave me shock for a little time. Thank god that I was wrong.
A good friend is more precious than anything and you have such a kind of friend. I think you are lucky to have such kind of friends.
I am very lucky in so many ways. My friends are always there for me if I take the time and listen :D
Writing has a deep place in my heart. The same goes for Hive. I do not think I could stop either even if I wanted to.
I AM sorry I worried you!! Thank you for your comment. I think we all sometimes forget who is all out there reading our writing.
HUGS!
That's a good thing. Feeling good to hear it .
A little bit. But after reading few lines I understand it. No need to be sorry for it🙂. I can understand.
Agree with it. But don't worry I won't let you forget about me😅. I will show up in your articles comment 😂.
Very vivid imagery! Both the versions are really nice.
Hope everything works out for you. You're pretty special.
Thank you so much Wiebe!!!
It will work out. Sometimes, it takes a few years longer than we want it to...
HUGS!
Whoever that person is, I am grateful for them too. You are incredibly important in this crazy flipping world. A true angel yourself 💕
This is a beautiful scene Snook, I hope all your real-life clouds meet the same fate 💚🤗
Thank You, Grindan!!!!
and I am happy you liked my scene. It was a good exercise for me to do. I need to do more of them. I liked the end result but than again I like lots of words too :D
HUGE HUGS!
I love this snook.
And especially the way you personify the earth so well in the scene you describe 🙂
You also definitely achieved what you set out to do 👍 as the second draft was tighter and more concise in its descriptions.
Well done 🙂
P.s. I hope your week has improved as it sounds like you had a rubbish time.
Thank You raj808!!!!
I had fun trying to keep the essence of what I wrote yet to make it easier to read. I am happy you liked it too!!
My week is getting there... A few more Doctor visits and, hopefully, things will start looking up :D I just need to remember that writing helps get rid of a lot of stuff floating in your mind :D
Yes, writing can definitely be a healing and cathartic activity.
I'm glad it brought you some relief from your health struggles.
I'm sending virtual hugs, healing vibes and !LUV 🤗 🙂
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We all have friends that are near and dear to us. We may not speak much but if things happen they are always there to help if they can.
very true
HUGE HUGS!
Thanks for the shout out on twitter, Happy new year! !PIZZA !BEER
you are very welcome!
I appreciate you taking the time, to either use my TAG, or post in my Community. There are plenty of them to choose from. So...
Thank you!!
THANK YOU!!
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Both the version are good and your writing skill are improving, Best of luck
So glad the right person turned up at the right time. It makes a world of difference.
You are never alone , is ok to seek for help, we all need it sometimess.
Your writing is improving you are doing a good job!
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