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RE: [Short Story] - A revolutionary product

in #davidkain6 years ago

Thank you!
It was a real delight writing it down because of how silly the baby wipes were and yet so very deadly at the same time.
Paints a new perspective on gang-wars and killing drug lords.
I wonder how much this chemist got paid for what he had done, and what his past (and future) work was... I might employ the chemist villain again sometime... It's fun! :D

And the movements you mentioned... YES! Thank you so much for noticing and enjoying that! The part with liquefying was by far my favorite! It just instantly paints the picture in your head of a person who had completely lost his motor functions and just lays immobile.

Indeed it is! Your upvote definitely helped! Thank you very much! :D

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He wanted to act tough but I could tell he was already tripping hard–his eyes turned vacant and his head was wobbling side to side. “What did you do to me?”

It looked as if his body liquefied and spilled over his leather armchair.

Come Monday Ray was in a far better mood–I had a product he was very much interested in.

“Synthetic rubber.” I peeled off the clear coat of rubber from my arm as if it were an additional sleeve–the expression on his face was priceless.

Yesss! The synthetic rubber layer was priceless!

Now that you mentioned these.... I have a hard time re-picking my favorite! :P

So very happy to hear you enjoyed it!