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RE: A Case of the Pumpkins -- a five-minute #freewrite

in Freewriters5 years ago (edited)

It won't let me edit my comment... so... replying to myself.


That's just the end of the scene -- the beginning is so much worse.

“I’ve been disappointed since this afternoon and everything has horrified me since about then too, but I understand,” she murmured, closing her eyes and waiting for the mead to slowly disappear. “I bet you my aura is tasty, though. Can you taste auras?” She giggled. He paused for a moment, and then whispered, “I can taste you…”

I CAN TASTE YOU. really.

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Both excerpts are really much, much better than you think. :)