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RE: it happened again

Of course, you are right. I think I’m just stressed about a number of things and so they’re incorrect assumptions about my upcoming trip have been getting on my nerves. It happens.

You liked number two. I was torn about the final line. Initially I finished it with listen to the earth. I really like how that line stands alone, but reading the poem all together I felt like using it gave the poem a little more flow. I also toyed with using the word world instead of earth.

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Naaa, using earth twice would have been odd. Finishing with "listen to it" enables the poem to be balanced and in a state of flow. And I prefer "earth" over "world" as it makes it more palpable, more tangible somehow. Yeah, no 2 is definitely my favorite 😊

Thanks for the feedback. It’s nice to know what others think about these little editorial decisions.