Of course, you are right. I think I’m just stressed about a number of things and so they’re incorrect assumptions about my upcoming trip have been getting on my nerves. It happens.
You liked number two. I was torn about the final line. Initially I finished it with listen to the earth. I really like how that line stands alone, but reading the poem all together I felt like using it gave the poem a little more flow. I also toyed with using the word world instead of earth.
Thank you for commenting.
Naaa, using earth twice would have been odd. Finishing with "listen to it" enables the poem to be balanced and in a state of flow. And I prefer "earth" over "world" as it makes it more palpable, more tangible somehow. Yeah, no 2 is definitely my favorite 😊
Thanks for the feedback. It’s nice to know what others think about these little editorial decisions.