Senses Lost
In this moment, it was all laid bare,
and at that moment you weren't there.
All had crumbled, all had bled,
who we were was replaced by who was ahead.
And still we tried until we cried
til the stars blinked out at the end of time.
Two parts of one whole, separated at birth,
The way of the sky between the earth.
We were told our origins are how we thrive,
while the truth tells as it was a lie.
Intimacy and passion, femininity and grace,
Masculinity and compassion, together in space.
Once hand in hand they'd both walk,
About the seas, the cliffs and children talk.
Life combined and forever bound,
destiny held in a lover's sound.
Yet there it lay, drained of life,
For it was stolen by desire's knife.
A thousand cuts to bleed it out,
No alternative except to go without.
And to finally come to fall entirely still,
like a fly dead upon the window sill,
So close to forever, so close to free,
Separated by an invisible screen.
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Is this about end of relationship or marriage?
Yes and no I guess. As I wrote it, it is more about the end of all relationships that we used to value, abd replacement by substitutes that aren't edwquate alternatives.
I personally had no idea cheating could hurt so much till I experienced it firsthand.
I have been cheated on in the past, but I got over it quickly. I take the approach that if someone doesn't want to be with me, that is their choice. It is obviously better if they leave before cheating though.
You have conveyed something very profound and beautiful in a few sentences. I like the last few lines "Our life is truly empty". We are very close to eternal life. These lines remind me of death because we are not far from death. As if separated by an invisible curtain. Anyway, what exactly do you mean by death here?
I see that as a society, we are dying, because we are more interested in feeding our consumer desires than connecting with our community. We are disconnecting from social life and becoming isolated and alone, and pretending we are better off because of it. We are not.
Societal pressures can distort our connections, making us feel alone even when surrounded by people.
I think "alone" is the default for many people these days.
I assume this is about marriage and you're right. Spouses are two parts of a whole, and not two whole parts, who come together to be one. Even though they become one, marriage is still a difficult institution, that requires patience and understanding to navigate.
Not just about marriage I reckon. Men and women in general. Rather than union, it is seen as an adversarial position today.
It reads circumstantially sad but true. Most of the times endings aren't welcome or espected. Specially the sad ones. Separated ways are somtimes forced decisions or just faith.
Separation is part of life. We all will face loss. But, connection is something we can choose.
It's a bitter part of life. I'm through one now. Circumstances are bitches. Conection even chosen appears to be lost now and it's sad when that happens. Even when I have faced loss many times.
I briefly considered responding here with another poem, but I don't think that's fair. I prefer to reread your poem and enjoy it in silence. The emotion comes, and it's appreciated!
With this poem, you took me on such a deep journey that you shattered the invisible screen in my soul, my heart, my most sensitive cell. Congratulations :)
Reading the poem, I felt like it was a silent reflection of the deep emptiness of human relationships and existence. The last line really moved me. I think it symbolizes the invisible distance in life that we feel every day but cannot touch.
Que bueno. Intentaré publicar en su comunidad
I only speak English
Hi. "What a good one. I'll try to post in your community.." that's what I commented on, so did my community post, hope you come back
Dear @tarazkp !
I guess you are currently suffering from the pain of the surgery that cut into your body!
By the way, Are you uncomfortable with your relationship with your family?
Are you happy with your relationship?
Dear my bro @tarazkp !
I'm ashamed to say I still live alone!
So, I'm not satisfied with my life in reality!😅
Maybe if you are ashamed by your life, you should be questioning yourself instead.