This is a great story and really gives some valuable insight into the Dolly character, her back story is very tragic, also you cover the darkness of living in this world without going into too much explicit detail! You give enough information about her previous run-ins with clients and the aftermath of her experience, to really paint a picture of this brutal world, giving enough detail so that our minds can make up the rest of the picture and what a nasty picture it paints.
There are a few small grammatical errors and spelling mistakes here and there, but, nothing that can't be fixed in the edit. It's a well-thought-out piece of fiction though and really goes into great detail in areas and helps to expand this Sci-fi/ Cyberpunk, Dystopian world and it is good that you gave the NSFW warning!
I love the idea of the characters you added into this, from her mother, her husband, and where her husband went. I love the idea of talking about space while our character is planted firmly on the ground, I also like the use of names for the weapons, modifications, and even vehicles, it is a great use of World Building!
It is a great entry and I think you could benefit from checking out The Scholar and Scribe Community. There is some great reading material up there, a chance to get talking to other writers to share hints and tips, as well as write some more stories of your own. Based on the level of detail added to your story about the world, I think you might also like The World Building Community. Who gives daily prompts to get us thinking and creating World Building and Lore details, talking about things we like, or creating our own stuff from scratch!
Before posting any more content though, your first order of business should be to head over to The OCD Community. To write and post an introduction post, talking about yourself, your interests, what you hope to do here on Hive, and how you came across the platform! Make sure to use the tags, Introduceyourself, Introduction post, and ocd.
Well done on this story and I can't wait to read more of your posts and especially your introduction post, which is a rite of passage for every new Hivian! Happy Hiving! Keep up the good work!
!PIZZA
Wow!! I did not expect such a good report. Thank you, thank you sooo much!! I have not written anything for a very long time. This was my first attempt writing a sci-fi story. I knew it was going to be hard not watching to much sci-fi movies. I liked the idea of turning her tragedy background into a hero story. Inspiring others to look beyond their daily circumstances. In writing you can literally become anyone and escape anywhere. Creating the characters you want and also decided how you want your audience to interact with the. I just love a good ending story.. call me old fashioned HEHE. I hope to learn more and will follow your advice to the T.. again thank you, thank you. This piece was dedicated to my brother that was shot and killed in 2018.