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RE: Fast and Furious|The inkwell fast and furious festival day two

in The Ink Well3 years ago

Hi @dwixer,
Great work. I think your first and last nail it. You suggest a story merely by telling readers about furniture in a room. There are no toys, no children, and yet there is a conspicuous picture of a woman and her baby. There's a picture of a "lonely" woman. And a sofa facing the pictures. It seems you are telling us about someone who longs to have children but does not have them, or perhaps someone who had a child and lost it. In any event quite vivid.

Also, in your last task, almost every word paints a scene of a street under by rain. I can almost feel the damp, and hear the rain beating on my roof. Well done!