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RE: HIS ADDICTION

in The Ink Well3 years ago

Hello @ubani1,
First of all, I'm impressed with your adoption of a female voice. It's good to stretch our writing muscles and imagine we are someone different from ourselves.

Also, I think you did a really good job of fleshing out the characters here. The father has given up on his own life, and on raising his child. But the child cannot give up on the father.

In the end, the child is alone"in a white hospital". That's a great image. White is the color of absence. The father is gone and the child is feeling the loss acutely.

Good story, @ubani1