This is poetic and lovely writing, @milezofplay. I encourage you to expand on your next story. Tell us the names of the characters. Consider telling the story from the perspective of one of them, and introduce some conflict which must be resolved within the story. You can read about the importance of conflict in our post Introducing Conflict in our catalog of fiction writing tips.
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