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RE: A Setup

in The Ink Well3 years ago

Wow, that one got my heart racing, @ubani1! This story is well-written, nicely paced, and has some great dramatic elements.

This bit of dialog is perfect:

“Probably,” but Dele was frowning. “But I would have preferred a heads up so that when I found a gun pointed at my face I would not pee in my pants. Sir.”

Even when he's recovering from the fear of a lifetime, he has the presence of mind to use "Sir" in a rather ironic way.

Well done!