You had a good concept for this story but unfortunately stylistic errors weakened the narration. When an author's handling of a story distracts form the narrative, that's a problem. Specifically, you need to work on verb tenses and paragraphing. A simple rule, if you begin in past time, stay in past time - Keep it simple.
As for paragraphing, there's no hard and fast rule - it's an art. Basically a paragraph should be at least three sentences long - it should have a beginning, middle and end. I break that rule all the time, but you have to master the rule to know when to break the rule. I often insert a short one sentence paragraph for dramatic effect - for emphasis. You did that with your final paragraph - ie, two short sentences. But generally, you favoured shorter paragraphs - you set your own pattern and then broke it with one awkwardly long passage when you uncovered your lover's infidelity.
As I said at the beginning, you had a good concept, but little foxes spoil the vines. Go back over the story and learn from it. That's how you become better. Sometimes I mess up big time and I'm embarrassed. I've taught writing and I know Literature - it means nothing when you're being creative because it's virgin territory. You learn from every new story. And you never stop learning in this craft. Keep up the good work!
Hmm. Alright.
Noted... @johnjgeddes
I will take note of your corrections and make use of it.
Thank you for reading through😊