An interesting plot, you make a lot of use of dialogue - I did wonder, whether you could have shown some of the conversation through what the characters did. Do you often draw on spoken word, or could some additional focus on action have helped elevate the piece. What do you reckon?
Thank you very much for your observation. I really resorted a lot to dialogue in this story, I could have narrated some events that happened. I will keep that in mind for other stories.
Regards