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RE: The Adventures of Ramon Letondu, Part II

in The Ink Well4 years ago

You have used persnickety verb tenses incorrectly, making it difficult to follow. Your first and last sentences are in present perfect tense, which is a wonky tense to write in. But pretty simple to fix I think.

Three simple verb tense suggestions to make it less clunky:

  • It took him only two hours to drive from the border
  • where he first rented a room
  • Borderia stayed neutral
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Thank you very much for your suggestions.