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RE: Royal Temptation.

in The Ink Well2 years ago

Thanks for sharing your story in The Ink Well, @camerafanatic.

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In your story, you use the word "hare" several times. A hare is actually another name for a rabbit. The word you need there is "heir" which is the word for a person who will inherit something, such as a throne, land or wealth.