Kenzie was certainly foiled by the young ladies. You have here very strong character development and great descriptions. The story is detailed and you are methodical in going from hapless girlfriend to hapless girlfriend.
Structurally, the story works well. However with such a great buildup, readers find the resolution rather abrupt. Kenzie does forget to cover his tracks and the girls catch him. But, after all the great detail in the first part of the story, we would like to know a little bit more about how that happens. We offer this advice because you are a writer who is developing very strong skills and we want to encourage that.
Thank you very much for writing this detailed and well-developed story. We appreciate that you engage with other authors in the community.
Keep writing, @cool08!
Ok, I will check it out again. Thanks a lot..