Hello @farahikram,
You address the prompt (proud) and skill challenge (character description) well. At the end of your story you offer a moral (lesson):
It is rightly said,
"A Pride hath a fall."
This sort of ending statement from an author, or expression of moral, is called author intrusion. There is an article in the Inkwell Catalogue that addresses this issue. As explained in that article, such lessons are best left to the characters in a story.
For example, you might have written something like this in the last paragraph:
Kim realized that in fact, pride brings about a fall.
This construction would keep the moral within the character's perspective and yet get the point of your story across.
Thank you for sharing this story with us. Have you commented on the stories of two other writers in the community this week? Thank you!