Belle has an interesting history, which has intertwined her life with responsibility and duty. You paint her background nicely here, drawing us in with curiosity. However, we also feel that this story would flow better with some editing. Many authors find it helpful to use Google Documents to catch grammatical errors and streamline their stories.
Additionally, we believe you might learn from an article in our catalog of fiction writing tips called Show, Don't Tell. This is a fascinating story, we hope these tips help you see how you could have elevated it even further! Thank you for sharing your story with us, and for your engagement with other members of the community.