Hello @marriot5464,
The story is written well. You capture the scene with detailed descriptions. We understand the motivation of each character. However, it is difficult for us to make the leap and understand how this couple could realize Liam's plan.
Most readers have been in the hospital, or have had relatives who were in the hospital. Twelve hours between treatments--usually that means someone is hooked up to an IV. And twelve hours between treatments means the patient will be very sick in that time. Are the treatments without side effects? It's a terminal illness. One would imagine the treatments are powerful. And, Maya will leave everything behind, drop her life and obligations for this man she hasn't seen for years? This is a hard premise for readers to accept, and generally readers have to believe in the underlying theme of a story.
Thank you for sharing this with us, @marriot5464. It was an interesting, engaging read.